What happened?
It started good with the silent sea and the city. And how the guy played his video game without noticing. The dramatic scene with the girl was also perfect. The fight started and it was pretty neat what you did with the ground idea there too.
But it's here it all took a big turn. From all that to and DBZ looking fight with super powers. Jesus turns into a transformers robot and they fight with swords and magic while the monster all of the sudden too got magical powers. They jumped around a bit and in the middle of the fight; TO BE CONTINUED.
What?
That made no sense. You should have kept some "logic" while you had it but you let it slip right through you at the end. Also, the drawings were pretty sketchy (art term for that would be "chicken skratch") try to make your line art clean in the next episode.
What I think you need to practice mostly is your way of writing the script. After you have written a script, read it out load for yourself. And ask yourself; does all this connect? Because I don't think this did.